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Magnolias
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i was described as a cutthroat, sarcastic and intrepid;
reminding others of what you perceive yourself as will cause them to believe it;
but when you tell them how you really feel, they'll never adapt with a liar.
join the bandwagon of failures and look up at the stars
they'll cascade into your skin,
gnawing through your bones, but you can't scream;
it's something no one should go through, but life has to be interesting.
every last remnant of their innocence,
only because they complain of their loneliness;
"tell him that you'd die for him,
and never leave.
don't refuse when he asks you your secrets;
he wants to know who you really are.
and don't cheat.
stay fragile,
he'll take you in and love you forever.
you should do the same, rather than be indolent;
boys like ride or die bitches.
girls like danger.
perfect pairing."
reminding others of what you perceive yourself as will cause them to believe it;
but when you tell them how you really feel, they'll never adapt with a liar.
join the bandwagon of failures and look up at the stars
they'll cascade into your skin,
gnawing through your bones, but you can't scream;
it's something no one should go through, but life has to be interesting.
can you teach me how to feel?
i am crafted of porcelain and cyanide,
infused with remorse;
why won't anyone believe me when i say,
"i need you"?
i have taught virgins how to expose i am crafted of porcelain and cyanide,
infused with remorse;
why won't anyone believe me when i say,
"i need you"?
every last remnant of their innocence,
only because they complain of their loneliness;
"tell him that you'd die for him,
and never leave.
don't refuse when he asks you your secrets;
he wants to know who you really are.
and don't cheat.
stay fragile,
he'll take you in and love you forever.
you should do the same, rather than be indolent;
boys like ride or die bitches.
girls like danger.
perfect pairing."
i am no longer a maiden buried in the snow;
i resemble a plumeria drowned in black,
twiddled with by your fingertips;
you are mnemonic.
you made me remember that i promised to never betray you,
so therefore,
i'm staying.
let them riot.
i resemble a plumeria drowned in black,
twiddled with by your fingertips;
you are mnemonic.
you made me remember that i promised to never betray you,
so therefore,
i'm staying.
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You are supposed to jump from the left side to the right side, in other words.Anyways, hope you liked it! That took hours to write >.<
-Chell
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactMarch 18, 2015 Critic 2-8 for :iconWriters—club:
After a holiday, I again take up my poison pen. As is my custom I comment where others won’t, one hundred words or more to the unwatched and underappreciated. If you feel I have done right by this work, go out and do the same for someone else.
Critic: Magnolias by <img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/d/a/d…" alt="
" title="DalekCaanII" /> Confidence vs. InnocenceVision: Excellent concept, Confidence vs. Innocence, the two intertwined and talking to each other.
Originality: I have read a works like this before, but the expression of pain is unique to this pome. The duality of one mind teetering back and forth… very refreshing
Technique: Every time I see this conversational style, I think I want to copy it. Then I remember how difficult it is. This is grate work, makes for both a visual and intellectual feast, both mind and eye.
Impact: Emotional impact is both warm and cold, sliding back and forth between… I want to say opposing views but they actually are not in opposition, they complement each other, saying the same thing, on a personally positive and negative perspective, at the same time. This, expressing the abuse of lovers for each other, especially the despair of a woman scorned.